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Recently by Optimistic_Aadil
Story of a cloud!
And then a gloomy cloud
halted and dissolved
into an ocean of tears.
Relieved after pouring
its fears, it flew with
the wings of merry birds
holding avenues of bliss
in their sights.
Roaming the skies
it was oblivious to
the sighs of unresting
waters below.
Enhaling air, its
chest turned heavy
with melancholy,
and it could think about
none, but pouring it again.
The cloud is a merchant,
trading pain with pain.
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Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 11:39 pm
Thanx augmentin!
BJ2 ... beautiful connections in your thoughts!
Thanx Quin! the lines you wrote are lovely as ever.
BJ2 ... beautiful connections in your thoughts!
Thanx Quin! the lines you wrote are lovely as ever.
Posted by quin on
Friday July 4, 2008 03:46 pm
Lot of rain here
Lot of drops
Cyclic pain
and words won't stop
Your poem is crafty and beautiful. Wonderful metaphor!
Lot of drops
Cyclic pain
and words won't stop
Your poem is crafty and beautiful. Wonderful metaphor!
Posted by BJ2 on
Friday July 4, 2008 01:29 pm
Aadil, good piece! Clouds inspire people like little else! Clouds have no fixed shape – so one can imagine whatever one wants in them. They have many shades – just like our mood has many shades. And they are eternal so they are always there when we need them. They can soak us and yet they can not be caught – they can be all around yet they are not a part of us. And they can not be owned by anybody but they are there for everybody!
Posted by augmentin on
Friday July 4, 2008 06:24 am
' The cloud is a merchant,
trading pain with pain'
Beautiful!
trading pain with pain'
Beautiful!
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 03:10 am
My browser actually crashed again and again and I tried to refresh it again and again; this was no sin for these comments to be flooded here. lolls..
Posted by goonga on
Friday July 4, 2008 03:00 am
opti cloud but bursing on his apna hi ilog:)
Posted by goonga on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:57 am
Opti, you are their cloud:) safe journey and safel return!
Posted by ayesha5 on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:57 am
You were quick in replying :-D
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:56 am
ooooooooopsss! sorry! really sorrry!
Posted by ayesha5 on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:56 am
Phew! aadil what's going on with the comments :-P
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:55 am
Welcome to kashkin! ... how are you bhayya? ...
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:55 am
Welcome to kashkin! ... how are you bhayya? ...
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:55 am
Welcome to kashkin! ... how are you bhayya? ...
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:55 am
Welcome to kashkin! ... how are you bhayya? ...
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:55 am
Welcome to kashkin! ... how are you bhayya? ...
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:55 am
Welcome to kashkin! ... how are you bhayya? ...
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Thanx for liking the concepts! I like your comments!
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:52 am
You are a hilarious goonga! lolls ...
I'm worried about the next 24 hrs coz I'll go home and I don't wanna spoil my day in a hell like hot Mardan with no electricity most the time. Lakin ghar tau jana hay ... let's pray for some crying clouds to come and share their tears with us; it will serve as jewel of happiness for us ... hahah
I'm worried about the next 24 hrs coz I'll go home and I don't wanna spoil my day in a hell like hot Mardan with no electricity most the time. Lakin ghar tau jana hay ... let's pray for some crying clouds to come and share their tears with us; it will serve as jewel of happiness for us ... hahah
Posted by kashkin on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:48 am
beautiful concepts aadil as the words do not seem what they are...what it appears to us from here on earth appears to disappear when up in the space......
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:47 am
Thanx Dilirium and ayesha!
The weather's extremely hot here as well. Just came back from Jumma prayers and everyone was melting in sweat.
The weather's extremely hot here as well. Just came back from Jumma prayers and everyone was melting in sweat.
Posted by ayesha5 on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:47 am
Forecast is that dry and hot weather would prevail for the next 24 hours :-S
And after that God knows :-P
And after that God knows :-P
Posted by goonga on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:44 am
A5,
we really need some clouds to pour its really get hot here too. more we need for merchant clouds!
we really need some clouds to pour its really get hot here too. more we need for merchant clouds!
Posted by goonga on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:42 am
*pain=note
Posted by goonga on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:42 am
i liked that you have started ending it on high pain!
personification is the word! right! just was concerned about new fight coming up!
chest was heavy is some thing like feminine curve! just warning you... shah jee phir na kehna yeh kiya?
personification is the word! right! just was concerned about new fight coming up!
chest was heavy is some thing like feminine curve! just warning you... shah jee phir na kehna yeh kiya?
Posted by ayesha5 on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:34 am
The cloud is a merchant,
trading pain with pain.
I agree with goonga that is a fantastic line and concept.
We really need some clouds to pour. It's hot here.
trading pain with pain.
I agree with goonga that is a fantastic line and concept.
We really need some clouds to pour. It's hot here.
Posted by Delirium on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:31 am
Nice!
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Friday July 4, 2008 02:00 am
@goonga .... its personification; to metaphorically describe unliving things as living
There nothing vague behind the concept but just another way of looking at the process when a cloud is formed and dissolved in connection withthe waters below. I've tried to give it a melanchlic touch.
And of course, human is part of a larger whole ... lollls...
let's see which way the wind blows in the next session ...hah..
Thanx for liking the phrase you've mentioned!
There nothing vague behind the concept but just another way of looking at the process when a cloud is formed and dissolved in connection withthe waters below. I've tried to give it a melanchlic touch.
And of course, human is part of a larger whole ... lollls...
let's see which way the wind blows in the next session ...hah..
Thanx for liking the phrase you've mentioned!
Posted by goonga on
Friday July 4, 2008 01:34 am
wew... loved this trading pain with pain
btw:
And then a gloomy cloud
halted and dissolved
into an ocean of tears.
if you say that, again, that you write for the love for nature then does not you are using human symbolization for description of nature and then you affirm that using it again in
Within no time, its
chest was heavy
with melancholy,
I know you would say that human is also part of nature but again just wondering what would happen in next reading session!
btw:
And then a gloomy cloud
halted and dissolved
into an ocean of tears.
if you say that, again, that you write for the love for nature then does not you are using human symbolization for description of nature and then you affirm that using it again in
Within no time, its
chest was heavy
with melancholy,
I know you would say that human is also part of nature but again just wondering what would happen in next reading session!
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