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Random lamentation ..
No sign preceded the tempest;
the sky hid secrets
under the hoax of clear azure
before it split
to inflict a fierce pain-storm
upon me.
And wells swelled with every
step you took on your way
back in your sudden defection
from my chest.
The tides rose
to blur the dreams
of islands in my eyes.
Like a boat, severed
with torn up sails, I float
on the whims
of wild winds intent
on giving me the torture
of your loss
before sinking me deep
into obscurity.
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Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Monday June 29, 2009 04:17 am
@ leenah .. yes, that was loss .. I was lost in the lost :P
So very thanks for correction as well as for liking the poem :) I like your comments for you are one of the galaxy of ilogers I admire on chowk.
@ Nikhat .. I'm indebted for your kind words! Bless you! :)
So very thanks for correction as well as for liking the poem :) I like your comments for you are one of the galaxy of ilogers I admire on chowk.
@ Nikhat .. I'm indebted for your kind words! Bless you! :)
Posted by Nikhat on
Monday June 29, 2009 03:57 am
Oh My God...That’s ur humility and kindness brother. But My English and Urdu both are bad- still ‘Tifl-e-maktab’u know.
Your poems all that I came across though are devoid of lofty philosophical ideas but are packed with sweet sentiments of youthful romanticism and fetish for nature which clicks me. So keep writing, keep experimenting and keep learning.
Allah bless you!
Posted by leenah on
Monday June 29, 2009 03:47 am
I like this one the best
The tides rose
to blur the islands of dreams
in my eyes
reminds me of an incomplete story ,
'uski aankhon mein Raavi chadnay laga. Khawaboon kay sabhi jazeeray jaisay dhundli yad ho gaey....'
Aadil, isn't it 'loss' in the 3rd last line?
The tides rose
to blur the islands of dreams
in my eyes
reminds me of an incomplete story ,
'uski aankhon mein Raavi chadnay laga. Khawaboon kay sabhi jazeeray jaisay dhundli yad ho gaey....'
Aadil, isn't it 'loss' in the 3rd last line?
Posted by Optimistic_Aadil on
Monday June 29, 2009 03:09 am
Thanks a lot Nikhat! I'd like you to comment me for improvement as well as I wrote it in a rush to feed my blog, a naive approach to writing poetry, though :)
Posted by Nikhat on
Monday June 29, 2009 02:32 am
Oh! it is soooo beautiful!!!
Similies of nature has turned this poetry into an emotional 'Paani-Paani' painting. Every word strikes the chord of imagination to embarg you on a sad tale of a lonely voyager.
Similies of nature has turned this poetry into an emotional 'Paani-Paani' painting. Every word strikes the chord of imagination to embarg you on a sad tale of a lonely voyager.
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