My Dudley!

#12 Posted by MantoLives on January 4, 2006 10:42:52 pm

Killmen

you are welcome to do so..

write to ``editor@naseeb.com`` and put ``ref: Yasser Hamdani``

#11 Posted by Bina_Shah on January 4, 2006 7:45:16 pm

Great fun! Looks like Pakistan has its answer to Bridget Jones.

I want Part 2.

#10 Posted by scout on January 4, 2006 3:22:44 pm

asma,

i didn`t like this story but i like your laid back style of writing, plus you have a good attitude about yourself and criticism, which is impressive in itself.

good luck

#9 Posted by avkrishna on January 4, 2006 10:38:06 am

Great beginning Asma,
Keep going,

- Avkrishna

#8 Posted by ELUSIVE on January 4, 2006 7:36:34 am

Oh God. if this is the way an average Pakistani woman thinks...

SOS please!

How old is the girl in the story?She seems to be a teenager.

I laughed all the way through.it was quite pleasurable reading this story.Although, the style of writing needs more professionalism, but that will come with time.

Keep writing.

#7 Posted by kill-men on January 4, 2006 6:48:45 am

Scout, thanks for your opinion, and am sorry you didnt like it.
Yin yang, thanx!
and mantolives, i am taking your offer very seriously, and am planning to flood your inbox with a barrage of articles :)

#6 Posted by yin-yang on January 4, 2006 5:50:46 am

asmaa, enjoyed this a lot. this is what many girls go thru & you made it sound just so humorous & lively. liked the conversational style, only at one or two points it was like you are feeling superior. all in all good work. this is what young women talk about anyways

#5 Posted by scout on January 4, 2006 5:21:02 am

kill-men,

it`s not your fault, the fault lies within the person who published this article, and thus underestimated the intelligence of female chowk interactors who may come to the `woman`s room` with a ton of hope tucked under their bras.

#4 Posted by scout on January 4, 2006 5:17:16 am

i came to the `woman`s room` with a lot of hope..... but all i feel like doing right now is pounding my head against a wall

#3 Posted by MantoLives on January 4, 2006 4:14:27 am

Well keep writing... hopefuly we will finally have a truly hilarious, frank and comic Pakistani English novel yet... I write/sub-edit for Daily Times and my wife is the editor of Naseeb Vibes.. if you are ever interested in contributing something - do send it over.

#2 Posted by kill-men on January 4, 2006 3:10:55 am

Thankyou so much! you have no idea what that means to me! And, no, amna is not a sister, although i got the idea of writing this aritcle when a family friend`s daughter got married, and their meetup point was also at Mcdonalds. So, it`s not entirely a work of fiction.:) Thanks again!
asmaa

#1 Posted by MantoLives on January 4, 2006 12:35:50 am

Dear Asma,

Your attempt is not amateur at all... pretty good.

Is it completely fictitious or is Amna your sister?