Tribute to Mother

But violent hands had bent you in force, they broke you almost! ``

She was bent but certainly not broken and that strength showed up as determination to guide her daughters to independence and therefore, to safety.
The feelings come through very well but if a few more words are pared down to tighten the lines, the poem would be even more forceful. Enjoyed reading it though, Vidya...well done.

``But violent hands had bent you in force, they broke you almost! ``

She was bent but certanly not broken and that strength showed up as determination to guide her daughters to independence and therefore, to safety.
The feelings come through very well but if a few more words are pared down to tighten the lines, the poem would be even more forceful. Enjoyed reading it though, Vidya...well done.

a great one that truly ignites da emotions

Shehr meiN aa kar paRhanay walay bhool gayay
kal kis ki maaN nay kitna zewar baicha tha

Feelings
Nothing more than feelings
Feelings of love….
Teardrops
Rolling down on your face
So well you remember
Feelings of love…..
Feelings, feelings
Like Y’ve never lost her
And feeling like
Have her in your heart.
Feelings, wo-o-o feelings,
Feelings...

thats a nice one indeed...