Chore! Chore!

A confident, sharp and witty voice; an insight into a closed society and culture; a tale touching many lives, exposing follies and fears...and ending on a thoughtful note. A great read all the way.

Kia baat hai .. undoubtedly grate job Adam.

Rora taa dair kha aakasi`ay karay day da zumungh`o paykhawar maasharay...keep it up i`m also writing on something relating to our culture of peshawar.

Nain.

Its awsome, can I link it on my blog?

Zabardast

Brilliant Adam ,
You are very promising; I can see sparkles of brilliants in you. I am from kerala, south of India, your characters are real and with little bit of cosmetic touch up, can be from any where in the sub continent and not just NWFP. Make sure you keep portraying them honestly but without reinforcing prejudices and stereotypes. I am impressed by your style of narration. Its time you start working on a full length novel .all the best.

Any more stories coming our way?

wah wah..

Masha Allah!

This is a writing worth a million words, unfortunately I have only to express my pleasure: SUPERB!

Look forward to read more of your writings.

Good Luck & Allah Hafiz,

:-)~~

There are streaks of brilliance in this writing.

It should have come to our attention on the top

of the CHOWK page.

We hope to hear more from Adam Khan here.

Ras

Adam Khan
This is the best article ever written in cyber world.

You have successfully incorporated influences of influential, traditions of traditionals and personal experiences of oppressed people into your work.

Congratulations!
For a well-rounded overview of native culture and it`s curses.

...simply superb, Adam Khan!!

enjoyed this very much .... keep writing..

a couple of typos.. heroine should be heroin and marshal law should be martial law.

if this didnt make the FP, I dunno what else deserves it ?

I haven`t read much of Manto (S H), but from whatever I have, this piece reminds me of his style.

Beautifully written, and just imagine, I would have missed it but for echoboom`s alerts on other threads. My thanks to you too, echoboom!

Thank god, there are still people like adamkhan around.

Welcome Adamkhan ...

Good beginning ... great story ... reminds me of namak mandi .. look forward to see more ...

Dakhudey pamaan ...

Fantastic story, adamkhan. Can`t wait to read more from you!

I grew up in Peshawar and know all of these characters. Jiyala was most probably my classmate at Edwards College. Good job Adam. The story is fictional but it reflects the real character of our society:

Dhoka rawa, faraib rawa, dushmani rawa
Hulchal rawa, fasaad rawa, sansani rawa
Insaan ka lahu pieo yeh izn-e-aam hey
Aur angoor ki sharaab ka pina haram hey