Chore! Chore!

Wonderful! What a marvelous attempt to capture the various nuances of society! Keep writing.

Excellent.

Truly a good piece..

I wonder why didn`t it make to the main columns..

very well done..

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the way characters were defined..it reminded of the Qissa Chahaar Darwaish..

MAGNIFICENTO..!!!!!!!!

Absolutely fab!

I knew there was a reason why i didn`t ever cross the border into Sarhad!!!!

This is a masterpiece indeed! A splendid depiction of the prevailing soceity and its grotesque norms.
All the characters have been beautifully carved out and though some might seem redundant in the beginning, seem to build up well towards the end. It`s been a while since i read such a brilliantly executed piece of fresh prose.
Looking forward to read more from you.

PS. Can`t help agreeing with kaptain...constantly repeated same old political and diplomatic BS keeps adorning the `Main Page` on this website while such exquisite literary works are cast intto these inferior-looking sections hardly noticable when one visits the main page, unless he scrolls down. I find them really pointless and condescending for the writers.

great job ADAM!
its a magnificent piece of work!
It is one of the few pieces that I could i feel i was experiencing myself. i came from a very similar place, but in punjab. Your article really paints the pictures, and shows the colors of a typical ``mohallah``
good job.. keep it up! good luck!
Ammara

Thank you guys, your appreciation means a lot.

adamkhan:

This was a treat indeed. This is the kind of writing in the english language which should be part of our school curricula & not the westoxicated or farangi-infested ``literature`` which is posted here by the fat-laden behinds--a.k.a Ba ba Blacksheep.

Urstruly is another great story-teller. Read his stuff , if you have not already.

I grew up in Peshawar and know all of these characters. Jiyala was most probably my classmate at Edwards College. Good job Adam. The story is fictional but it reflects the real character of our society:

Dhoka rawa, faraib rawa, dushmani rawa
Hulchal rawa, fasaad rawa, sansani rawa
Insaan ka lahu pieo yeh izn-e-aam hey
Aur angoor ki sharaab ka pina haram hey

Fantastic story, adamkhan. Can`t wait to read more from you!

Welcome Adamkhan ...

Good beginning ... great story ... reminds me of namak mandi .. look forward to see more ...

Dakhudey pamaan ...

I haven`t read much of Manto (S H), but from whatever I have, this piece reminds me of his style.

Beautifully written, and just imagine, I would have missed it but for echoboom`s alerts on other threads. My thanks to you too, echoboom!

Thank god, there are still people like adamkhan around.

enjoyed this very much .... keep writing..

a couple of typos.. heroine should be heroin and marshal law should be martial law.

if this didnt make the FP, I dunno what else deserves it ?

...simply superb, Adam Khan!!

Adam Khan
This is the best article ever written in cyber world.

You have successfully incorporated influences of influential, traditions of traditionals and personal experiences of oppressed people into your work.

Congratulations!
For a well-rounded overview of native culture and it`s curses.

There are streaks of brilliance in this writing.

It should have come to our attention on the top

of the CHOWK page.

We hope to hear more from Adam Khan here.

Ras