Guillotine

Thanks Zafar, for your feedback. Stick to chick lit huh? haha..

Actually, yes, it doesn't need to make sense Zafar.

Stick to chicklit, y'might. I mean there you go- hacking and slashing- but who ends up messy? Sure, he's done for, probably never going to get up again. Well, what did he ?! expect. But his problems are well over.
On the other hand, the best parts of his innards are splattered all over you.
You're no assassin and you're no victim. Others are- you are not by any stretch of the imagination. Of course, just maybe you don't know what you're doing. But then maybe it doesn't need to make sense Sadia.

Could surgical jagged blades thinly layer a soul? Perhaps these random red effluvial blips could sputter the sponge painted walls of my temple. And I shall sway and swirl with divine ecstacy.

Dear Sadia , are u as beautiful as your poems..

Morbid.

Perhaps you should try to read something by Alan Watts.

Peace!

why are pakis suddenly so obsessed with guillotines?... paki chowkies talk about it all the time...

Gruesome. I hate guillotines. Couldn`t you find a less morbid topic?!

PS: the extra line breaks are very distracting!

Hmm, nice!
Are U by any chance the same Sadia Rauf, ex Josephian?

Sweety, this was a bit too gory. It reminded me of that movie 300. But you do use strong words, and that`s what I like about your poetry.

Bloody good.

good rythm and pretty good......though it would have made more sense to say

``And leave you to bloody trust``

for it would have made more sense with the last line of the prev...verse(????)

a good and easy read and understandable - not to taxing!

Powerful stuff. The dust/rust lines are a bit awkward...other than that - yup.