The Horse and The Zebra

#38 by amansandhu

Echo,
Since Shazi`s parents brought him into this world they have to feed him,no.

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Of course, and they did...until he started showing his stripes and hind-kicking his parents.
That was the time to kick him out. His Parents are no less at fault...a typical scenario where the colonized ones are cockproud that they too have stars & spangles erupted on their bums.

Nice storyline and build up of characters. I agree with Raw-Dusts comparison of it with that of Raja Gidh and other works of Mufti, Bano, and Ashfaque. Some verbosity and redundancy could have been avoided but over all it belongs to the top category in Chowk short story line up.

By the way, I consider Raja Gidh the best damn novel written in any langauge ever.

A very imressive story indeed. I felt like being there all the time. It left me wondering though, what could had happened differently to make things better for Shazi? May be his family could be more accomodative or Shazi himself could be more proactice to drive his own destiny in addition to being intellectual and different than rest of the herd.
What can be a positive `take-away` or lesson learned? How can we help if any of us comes across anyone with similar situation?

Rafi, I really liked this story, kept me hooked till the end. You have a great narative style. I had stopped reading articles on FP and am glad that I read this one.
Parents dont realise the imensense damage they bestow upon children by constant comparisons. Shazi`s parents failed their child badly, they never made and effort to understand him. His contempt for Rafi is understandable.

Echo,
Since Shazi`s parents brought him into this world they have to feed him,no.

35 by Cigar on July 13, 2007 7:33am PT
I also have seen few donkeys pretending to be zebra, or may be I am one of those judgmental people.

You will find many of them on Chowk too

35 by Cigar on July 13, 2007 7:33am PT
I also have seen few donkeys pretending to be zebra, or may be I am one of those judgmental people.

You will find many of them on Chowk too

I didnt find it long at all, in other words I found it really interesting. i could relate this story to a few people i know. I also have seen few donkeys pretending to be zebra, or may be I am one of those judgmental people.

a refreshing piece. liked this alot.

Well done, Rafi_Aamer! I think the editing could have been a bit better, but I liked your language and the story itself. This is one of the most intelligent pieces I have seen in a long time on Chowk, and it reminds me of what I expected on chowk in the first place.

Naais!!

Good rendition. Very good read.

a great story - Rafi
plenty of rafishness ot it, and a delight to read on FP. what makes it even more delightful is that FP has been given over to political trash which donot make no diference to people`s lives.
Yours atleast brought a smile to the face!
Well done.

#5 by drsohail on July 12, 2007 12:52pm PT

``i hope you keep on writing essays and stories and not be discouraged
by the criticism...all the best...sohail``

from story...

``Yes, he is.`` I replied. The another betrayal was executed.

To me, its a such topic which compels to write what ever is inside the writer, If I were to write, friends, emotions, regrets would be my best choice so I really liked reading it. But I still find it a piece from ``Suspense Digest``. sorry for that.

Question:
Rafi, what would you do if you were Zebra? would you remain zebra or hide in horses or damage your lines or ...?

Beautiful. Really truly.

My advice- find yourself a good editor and get this published pronto. You are wasting your time on chowk.

Good one. Most people would have known a character like Shazi. I know at-least two.

Excellent read my friend.

Something I`m struggling with now. I`m somewhat of a Zebra, parents want me to be a horse. So here I am doing accounting, when what I want to do is philosophy, and dedicate my time to my music and my photography....that`s life

a very nice read!!!!