Two Tears in a Bucket

nb: Thanks a lot! Still working on talking better on paper. =) bear with me!

Wow, I had no idea there was such a storm on FP. Padash, once again I feel I know people like Rocky and the "other Pakistani stripper". I get the feeling your expereinces have affected you very deeply (it would be unusual if they didn't), and this is part of your self-therapy.
I enjoyed reading this, my only complaint is once again, that it was too long. It's hard to read long articles or stories online, so in the future, do think about breaking them into two parts.
Think about publishing these, I mean it quite seriously, I have said it before.

Teen sau se oopar rai diye gaye haiN, aur inn maiN se shayad bees ya bees se kam achay rai, aur baqi, zyaada taur par tauheen pe tauheen.

Ye hai Chowk, meri jaan. Piyo aur jiyo!

Good job Padash,
Enjoyed your interesting narratives and a brilliant style of presenting them. Keep up the good work.

#298: That's really demeaning to women (i.e. that a woman's opinions depend on her looks). Neembu hasn't - to my knowledge - descended to this level.

Unfortunately, she hasn't complained about sz's use of similar tactics against Padash either.

Padash
I enjoyed your story. Though I am doubtful if all incidents in this story are influenced by your real-life experience. Some parts of story appear to be influenced by recent movies such as Fashion.

However, this story kept me glued till end and that is what matters.

All the best. Looking forward to your future write-ups.

Regards

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For all your frustrations & complaints against those who abuse Ahmedis and others, read and then contect...

http://www.chowk.com/ilogs/73626/51299

Padash #280

looking forward to your next

The interacts here seem to be telling a story of their own. You write well Padash but maybe when you re-visit this later, you might need to flesh it out a bit more. But hey at least you are writing, that's a lot more than what we are doing.

#211 Posted by sattar2 on September 18, 2009 4:57:54 pm
{Eid mubarak to all you miserable bastards."}

Do number ka sattiyanus,
Apparently too much fasting has gotten to your head and you feel that you are talking to your parents. Anyway Eid Mubarak to you too - now go eat some brain food, stupid.

Goldfinger miaN, just because this writer has chosen to bare a few selective details from a (rather unusual) life does not mean that other aspects are up for grabs, too! I recommend that you (and others) limit your comments to the piece at hand, hopefully making constructive suggestions which could be useful.
:):):)

Re: # 290

Padash...dear, your story is so tantalizing for some people, that for some imperceptible reason it leaves them very empty on the inside...like you know (or maybe not) the feeling one carries home after having had the pleasure of a wonderful table dance...you know, that feeling of being so near and yet so far...however, you story is very interesting, particularly with that Pakistani twist...having said that, tell us how could you keep your self together and sane...for the lives of strip dancers are big messes...I know because a Greek friend of mine in college married an exotic dancer, and boy did they go through hell!

Re: # 215

harish...thanks, but really, doesn't it feel/look that way?

Who needs match.com when we have chowk: sz meet neembu. you guys r perfect fr each other!

neembu: you aspire to be a fiction writer, i dont. so i can care less if my life has stereotypical ppl in it!

reza-md: THANKs!

Padash, this is great writing. I enjoyed reading it.