Common Things

samina,
What a wonderfully written piece!
There are a lot of `obvious` things which have been deftly avoided, that someone else might have succumbed to and produced a common, maybe even treacly piece in trying to write a `real` piece, with all the attendant filth and smear of the setting. But you haven`t.
Having said that, this is something that should belong in a story, a larger narrative even.
there are parts I like, signs of good writing, and at first glance,usually found only `deceptively simple(whatvery that means!) -
like ``...and others in tongas, to rent and to replace``.
forget the criticism, but what`s important is it evokes an image, is very usual.that`s terribly important in writing. good work! sorry about hte loooong response.

why are u people so obsessed with whores, and pimps and hera mandi ?

i mean their are better things to write on then this , this is sick.

Hello,

This is quite nice story.

Ashraf Gohar Goreja

zabardast....y the women......y for trade...soundreally creative not like the bourgeouse whogo there for the sake if it and for mentioning it in teh drawing room literary circle

#24 Zehra

I agree with her you....and hope you had the awesome tavva chicken there....the best I have ever had!!

Can`t wait for the next piece, keep up the good work!

This was nice. Very.

Sadrang #68:

:) and welcome!

[…Shouldn`t it be ``Waft praises of the Lord``..]

brief answer:…yes it could be

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optional longer reply:

this is what the urdu version had:

Aur naz’d-o-doo’r minarouN say
Oos ki azmat ki sada
Ghubar aalood fiza say
KaanouN main tairti hay.

And the English came as:

Floating through the fog
From the mushrooming minarets
Wafts praises of the Lord.

…since I keep on playing with words till am satisfied (or give up, not!), was not happy with the last three lines and have changed it since posting first to this:

From the mushrooming minarets
Floating through the fog
Wafts in praises of the Lord.

But am not totally happy with this either and would have a go at this after some time has elapsed.

thanks for your interest,

rgds,

t

temporal #48:

Shouldn`t it be ``Waft praises of the Lord``

Great job.

great article,i must appreciate the effort that the writer ,ade in transffering the feelings and emotions so powerfully.

saxena..

oh you poor misguided soul you..i shall have to avoid any buses or neighborhoods that you frequent, just for that..`cause then, then, well then my violent colors would shine through and i`d have to make a human pinyata out of you as well!!! :)

raveena #63, ``...just because rsaxena called your queen latifah act on the other board, doesn`t mean you have to stalk him on every board now...``

him? raveena beti, i know you`re a girl, so no use trying to pretend. besides, no one in their right minds would even think about stalking u.

re: spout

{leave t-bhai alone or i`m gonna come down to ur neighborhood and turn u into a human pinata.}

...just because rsaxena called your queen latifah act on the other board, doesn`t mean you have to stalk him on every board now...

re: ana

...if i spot a nerd on the bus, i make sure all the kids on the bus know and jeer till the nerd gives up his/her nerdy ways...

raveena #55,

leave t-bhai alone or i`m gonna come down to ur neighborhood and turn u into a human pinata.

saxena

no--temporal writes in esperanto! but why should that matter. are you like one of those ign`nant folks on the bus who scream at us for speaking in any language other than English because we DO live in America afterall..America, the land of the free...geez louise!!!!