That Whore

I think this is an excellent read, such flow and such imagination. Just great!

[#83 Posted by rogues on November 9, 2006 9:43:37 am
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the moment she asked for those two rupees you pounced on that weakness and tried to make the most of it.]

Who is poncing? 17 year old girl and 17 year malaria stricken boy. I see whoring alright because girl asks for two rupees and does not run away first time kiss is mentioned. But I cannot see any pouncing.

kahani bahut achchhi hei. maza a gaya. likhte raho.

Urstruly,

loved your story. could not find any thing to critize. Please write some more.

Why did u call the story 'That Whore'. Does the title mirrors the perception of all male mentality(including me)?

ursturly,
it's my second read .I enjoyed it Good imagination!
wish of every teenager?

Urstruly.
I`m amazed that some of the biased-heads who have had arguments with you on others` articles dont bother reading your ``islamist oriented`` articles to comment on. Nothing further...

Wouldn`t want to say their names

LOL
RB

you write well, but no matter how many big words you use and how smooth the flow of you language is the fact remains that you saw a 17 yr old girl walking down the street, and you tried to have her.
the moment she asked for those two rupees you pounced on that weakness and tried to make the most of it.

you`re a gifted writer with incredibly deep sight. just a brief observation...you did find her her sun, but took it away too. what started off as divine generosity could hurt like hell too. still, keeping moral judgements aside, to those not acquainted with the methods of love, the pull of the sun spells destruction itself. but its never not worth the journey :)

good enuf......

all i can say is that it reflects the true crappy mentality of men

this is what i would expect of the elitist pakistani male mentality. a story written with a complete and intimate understanding of mysogynistic haughtiness. shows the baseness of men, the sad belief that man is above woman, and that female objectification is passively and actively supported by the pakistani male youth. the objectification of women on the basis of intelligence, appearance, and morality reeks of male authorhood. only a man with the twisted mindset which absorbs and supports society`s weakness of chauvinism can appreciate a story like this. it is repulsive and i was disappointed to have accidentally made its acquaintance. i`m sure the author pats himself on the back for causing such a stir. i wonder if ``that whore`` is supposed to be the name given the main male or female character in the story. in line with the mysogynist`s view, i might say it was fit for the female. however, i see that whore is none but the man.

sick staements like ``i felt like a god``... ``i defeted god``... ``god is a child playing with his toys``... ``god comes crying to us``.... are what made ur story un bearable... dont get carried away with ur creativity ...... freedom to speak doesnt mean freedom to make others feel bad or angry.... grow up... good writers dont write controvercial stuff.... clean ur soul brother... u need some light inside your dark mind....

I wudn`t even ask for 2 rupees. Lets have a deal here, u let me rest in your haweli, in your room for a while, and have it ur way!....hoz that for a burning afternoon`s deal?

ahmedzai

Appreciate it

Urstruly:

No offense taken.

I was just thanking you for the compliment.

Take Care.