I miss you

so many ideas in such a short piece?!!... but we were thrown out, locked out from where all the action and all the juice was... and by whom? me thinks narrator was getting in the way... behind the shades and closed-eyes - and the memories turning into dreams and dreams are creating their very own protagonist unlike a sad depressed protagonist that the narrator is busy creating.. who wins?

why the Time is pacing itself the same in the dream and in Reality? i say, kick out the narrator he probably was broughtup on watching State-TV....and go for the dreams ... coming in the way of what is Real... and take us there... there is a lot of interesting stuff happening there...

cheers.

Nadia:

I usually don’t like tear-jerkers for stories that I read (real life is bad enough) and I recommend grief counseling in sad situations! (As in “…paging Dr. LokRaj! Stop devouring all those mangoes and get your fanny over here at once!”)

But seriously Nadia, this one is a nice and touching story! Losing a beloved (at any time in life but especially at a young age) is devastating. From how you write it, it’s obvious that you have (at least) witnessed such devastation first hand. It shows.

Most of all, I like your genuine writing style! Ignore the hecklers. If they don’t like your stuff, ask them to go write their own!

nadia:

welcome!

miriam:

poignant yes...but...(ah life could be so simple without ifs and buts;))

found this boat floundered on bathos...had it remained in pathos that would have been better...my tuppence

lve

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Yawn.

I think the editor(s) of leafyglad inn have gone for a long break and these pieces are publishing un-noticed.

Nadia, this was poignant….i think saying anything else would be superfluous.

head or tail is not needed here, the emotion narrated fills the air, its complete.

in other words, i liked it. :)

#2 how true... couldnt have said it better myself...

kaurasach: i think the same can be said for many relationships in life..

there is no head or tail of this story - only torso - ?????