I miss you

Re: # 20

``everybody has his/her own space to write ``

Oh really? then how come u have such a boot up ur behind about my piece?

``I am not made for chowk and I never have made clear cut Great Expectations either. It is my perceptions to analyze certain elemnts and react accordingly irrespective genderly. ``

Oh! you are not made for chowk? for one moment i actually thought u ran this place...u sure as hell sound like it from ur comments...
Ur perception sux..and ur analyzing is overflowing with criticism..
Ever seen a lil kid sulking and being stubborn over the fact someone else got the candy they wanted? thats what you are doing...sulking over the fact my piece which may not be a masterpiece in ur high mighty eyes..landed the front page...

Well get over it..and if u r heated and got a problem...start a forum or a discussion somewhere else...talk about seeking ATTENTION...Ur unprovoked attack does nothing but make u appear jealous...

I have not wrote for ur benefit so that u can splash your crass comments over..my first attempt at writing...I am pretty sure ur first piece wasnt oozing with talent...

woops!!... you know what, i just read it again and i have to agree with you... i dont know what i was thinking... it came out sans coherence... nevermind but keep writing...

cheers!

Miss Nazia,

Please treat this as honest assessment:

``The twinkling lights faded out the cool soft breeze turned crisp and uncomfortable sending shivers down her spine``

Notwithstanding your writing skills this writeup doesnt cut with me. Perhaps crying in bed is such a woman thing. Perhaps I`m so comfortable with people around me that I dont miss the dead or the deserted. Or perhaps I`m just a heartless bastard :)

``Aila! This is turning out to be a self-assessment`` :))

But nahin, I`m not. So why doesnt it affect me like it does to others? Maybe, the void-the emptiness left behind from your beloved doesnt come out very clearly here. Or maybe I just dont like sad-melancholic stories. Or perhaps I`ve had my quota in Kafka.

Please please dont treat this as a review on your writing skills as such. From the few lines above it`s evident that I`m not qualified to judge your writing skills.

Cheers

Re: # 25

I appreciate everyones comment...neg and positive...really i do....what i didnt understand is why Nadia_Z Attacked so emotionally...she went OTT.

I am not a writer...i would like to be...and have alot to learn...i need to be told how i should improve...and not disheartened by someone who didnt criticise but instead blamed the Chowk for putting up my piece...i dont see any fairness in that...

Peace:)

Re: # 25

I appreciate everyones comment...neg and positive...really i do....what i didnt understand is why Nadia_Z Attacked so emotionally...she went OTT.

I am not a writer...i would like to be...and have alot to learn...i need to be told how i should improve...and not disheartened by someone who didnt criticise but instead blamed the Chowk for putting up my piece...i dont see any fairness in that...

Peace:)

My very candid opinion:

I have seen certain really good pieces stacked down in the unplugged section of Chowk which should have been there on the main page. And, sadly, they have been much better than this one.

Nevertheless,this short, piece by Mizz_Nadia , indeed echoes sentiments which majority of us have felt at some point in our lives and therefore, indeed most of us can relate to it.

But, frankly, the writing style is quite amateurish , but, there is definately room for improvement and i am sure that next time we will get to see, something, more descriptive and more polished from Mizz_nadia`s side.This is definately not your best piece Mizz_nadia but i am looking forward to reading something beter from you. I hope you won`t disappoint us.

All my regards and good luck.

** no offence intended- just an honest opinion- constructive critiscism my friend.**

Thank you Elusive:) i will try harder next time:))

What a comment kaurasach, lolz!!!!! :-).i liked that.

excellent work!
hope to see some more good stuff .... try some poetry im sure ull do good..
and dont worry about the comments ... just consentrate on expressing ur feelings the way u want..

There`s a nice flow to the writing and the descriptions are vivid but the theme is pretty old and there`s no real depth. Good work though - hope to see you writing more.